高考英語(yǔ)作文搶分攻略:考前必知五大高分特點(diǎn)!(2)
二、結(jié)構(gòu)合理,內(nèi)容充實(shí)
一篇好作文首先要有合理的結(jié)構(gòu),如果把一篇文章比作一個(gè)人,那么結(jié)構(gòu)就是骨骼,語(yǔ)言、材料是血肉。沒(méi)有健壯、分布合理的骨骼,血肉就無(wú)所依附,靈魂也就無(wú)處寄托,由此可見(jiàn)結(jié)構(gòu)的重要性。文章的結(jié)構(gòu)是文章內(nèi)容的基礎(chǔ),是作者寫(xiě)作思路的體現(xiàn)。文章的內(nèi)容要通過(guò)組織安排才能更合理地表達(dá)出來(lái),文章的主題也可以通過(guò)結(jié)構(gòu)加以凸現(xiàn)。 高考英語(yǔ)書(shū)面表達(dá)要求短文結(jié)構(gòu)完整,內(nèi)容充實(shí)。在段落劃分恰當(dāng)、布局合理的基礎(chǔ)上,考生應(yīng)根據(jù)主題恰當(dāng)?shù)亟M織材料,用具體的、充實(shí)的細(xì)節(jié)信息為框架提供有力的支撐。如果短文空話(huà)連篇,言之無(wú)物,寫(xiě)出的作文很難打動(dòng)人。
【典例2】假如你叫李華。最近,你的外國(guó)筆友Tom發(fā)來(lái)一封電子郵件,詢(xún)問(wèn)你心儀的大學(xué)。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面的寫(xiě)作提綱,給他回復(fù)一封電子郵件。內(nèi)容包括: 1.介紹你心儀的大學(xué); 2.為什么想上這所大學(xué); 3.你打算如何實(shí)現(xiàn)你的夢(mèng)想。 注意:1.詞數(shù)100左右;2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié),以使行文連貫。
【思路分析】根據(jù)題干可知,本文應(yīng)由三個(gè)段落組成。第一段陳述寫(xiě)作背景和寫(xiě)作目的:對(duì)方在郵件中詢(xún)問(wèn)自己心儀的大學(xué),為此回信告訴對(duì)方自己最想上哪一所大學(xué)。第二段是主體部分,也是寫(xiě)作的重點(diǎn):告訴對(duì)方為何選擇上那所大學(xué)。此外,還應(yīng)談?wù)劥蛩阍趺磳?shí)現(xiàn)自己的夢(mèng)想。第三段是結(jié)論段,總結(jié)前文,呼應(yīng)主題。
【學(xué)生習(xí)作】
Dear Tom, My dream college is Tsinghua University. I choose it because it ranks first among the best universities in China. I like it because of its strong academic atmosphere and beautiful campus. From now on, I will change my point of view to study. First, practice makes perfect, so Ill do lots of practice to improve my skills. Moreover, I will ask some meaningful questions to make myself clear about the knowledge I am learning. If I were not to be admitted into it, I will also benefit a lot from the process of realizing my dream.
Yours,Li Hua
【名師點(diǎn)撥】
第一段應(yīng)首先陳述寫(xiě)信的背景和寫(xiě)信的目的?忌苯痈嬖V對(duì)方自己心儀的學(xué)校是清華大學(xué),短文的結(jié)構(gòu)非常不合理。第一段可改為:In your email you asked me which university I want to go after graduation from high school. Now Im writing to share with you my dream university. Dogs are loyal friends.屬狗的人忠于朋友。 第二段考生應(yīng)陳述心儀的大學(xué)是清華大學(xué)、對(duì)清華大學(xué)情有獨(dú)鐘的原因以及如何努力爭(zhēng)取考入清華。學(xué)生習(xí)作正文第二段的內(nèi)容比較松散,不夠具體,連貫性和邏輯性較差。第二段可改為:My dream university is Tsinghua University. The reasons are as follows: first of all, Tsinghua University ranks first among universities in China because of its academic atmosphere. Second, many famous scientists who graduated from Tsinghua University have made great contributions to our society. I know it is hard to be admitted into Tsinghua University, but I will work hard at my lessons. I am sure my dream will come true if I try really hard. 習(xí)作的第三段沒(méi)有總結(jié)前文、突出主題,可改為:Such is my dream university. What about yours?
一篇好作文首先要有合理的結(jié)構(gòu),如果把一篇文章比作一個(gè)人,那么結(jié)構(gòu)就是骨骼,語(yǔ)言、材料是血肉。沒(méi)有健壯、分布合理的骨骼,血肉就無(wú)所依附,靈魂也就無(wú)處寄托,由此可見(jiàn)結(jié)構(gòu)的重要性。文章的結(jié)構(gòu)是文章內(nèi)容的基礎(chǔ),是作者寫(xiě)作思路的體現(xiàn)。文章的內(nèi)容要通過(guò)組織安排才能更合理地表達(dá)出來(lái),文章的主題也可以通過(guò)結(jié)構(gòu)加以凸現(xiàn)。 高考英語(yǔ)書(shū)面表達(dá)要求短文結(jié)構(gòu)完整,內(nèi)容充實(shí)。在段落劃分恰當(dāng)、布局合理的基礎(chǔ)上,考生應(yīng)根據(jù)主題恰當(dāng)?shù)亟M織材料,用具體的、充實(shí)的細(xì)節(jié)信息為框架提供有力的支撐。如果短文空話(huà)連篇,言之無(wú)物,寫(xiě)出的作文很難打動(dòng)人。
【典例2】假如你叫李華。最近,你的外國(guó)筆友Tom發(fā)來(lái)一封電子郵件,詢(xún)問(wèn)你心儀的大學(xué)。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面的寫(xiě)作提綱,給他回復(fù)一封電子郵件。內(nèi)容包括: 1.介紹你心儀的大學(xué); 2.為什么想上這所大學(xué); 3.你打算如何實(shí)現(xiàn)你的夢(mèng)想。 注意:1.詞數(shù)100左右;2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié),以使行文連貫。
【思路分析】根據(jù)題干可知,本文應(yīng)由三個(gè)段落組成。第一段陳述寫(xiě)作背景和寫(xiě)作目的:對(duì)方在郵件中詢(xún)問(wèn)自己心儀的大學(xué),為此回信告訴對(duì)方自己最想上哪一所大學(xué)。第二段是主體部分,也是寫(xiě)作的重點(diǎn):告訴對(duì)方為何選擇上那所大學(xué)。此外,還應(yīng)談?wù)劥蛩阍趺磳?shí)現(xiàn)自己的夢(mèng)想。第三段是結(jié)論段,總結(jié)前文,呼應(yīng)主題。
【學(xué)生習(xí)作】
Dear Tom, My dream college is Tsinghua University. I choose it because it ranks first among the best universities in China. I like it because of its strong academic atmosphere and beautiful campus. From now on, I will change my point of view to study. First, practice makes perfect, so Ill do lots of practice to improve my skills. Moreover, I will ask some meaningful questions to make myself clear about the knowledge I am learning. If I were not to be admitted into it, I will also benefit a lot from the process of realizing my dream.
Yours,Li Hua
【名師點(diǎn)撥】
第一段應(yīng)首先陳述寫(xiě)信的背景和寫(xiě)信的目的?忌苯痈嬖V對(duì)方自己心儀的學(xué)校是清華大學(xué),短文的結(jié)構(gòu)非常不合理。第一段可改為:In your email you asked me which university I want to go after graduation from high school. Now Im writing to share with you my dream university. Dogs are loyal friends.屬狗的人忠于朋友。 第二段考生應(yīng)陳述心儀的大學(xué)是清華大學(xué)、對(duì)清華大學(xué)情有獨(dú)鐘的原因以及如何努力爭(zhēng)取考入清華。學(xué)生習(xí)作正文第二段的內(nèi)容比較松散,不夠具體,連貫性和邏輯性較差。第二段可改為:My dream university is Tsinghua University. The reasons are as follows: first of all, Tsinghua University ranks first among universities in China because of its academic atmosphere. Second, many famous scientists who graduated from Tsinghua University have made great contributions to our society. I know it is hard to be admitted into Tsinghua University, but I will work hard at my lessons. I am sure my dream will come true if I try really hard. 習(xí)作的第三段沒(méi)有總結(jié)前文、突出主題,可改為:Such is my dream university. What about yours?
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