高考英語作文搶分攻略:考前必知五大高分特點!(3)
三、條理清楚,行文流暢
《考試大綱》中對寫作部分的要求是"考生應能:(1)清楚、連貫地傳遞信息,表達意思(2)有效運用所學語言知識"。 考生在寫作中應盡力做到:明確寫作目的,正確把握寫作內(nèi)容。內(nèi)容條理要清楚,行文要流暢,表達要地道。如果條理不清,行文沒有邏輯性,必然影響考生得分。
【典例3】假定你是李華,你校將接待一批來自美國的中學生進行為期兩周的交流活動。現(xiàn)在,學校正在為他們征尋寄宿家庭(host family)。請用英語寫一封信提出申請。內(nèi)容包括: 1.家庭基本情況;2.英語水平; 3.相關經(jīng)歷。 注意:1.詞數(shù)100左右;2. 可以適當增加細節(jié),以使行文連貫。
【思路分析】根據(jù)寫作要求,考生應寫一封申請信,向?qū)W校介紹自己的家庭情況,希望能入選寄宿家庭。申請信的第一段應表明寫作目的:申請成為寄宿家庭。第二段陳述自己的家庭具備的各種優(yōu)勢,包括家庭基本情況、英語水平和相關經(jīng)歷等;第三段表達希望獲準的愿望。
【學生習作】
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to apply for the host family that you have been searching for these days. Im Li Hua, an eighteen\|year\|old boy. I am friendly and helpful. I can communicate with native English speakers fluently. I am eager to make friends with foreigners so that I can learn more about Western cultures. My parents are both teachers and they teach me right from wrong. Although were not as rich as others, we live a comfortable life. I once volunteered to work for an international organization with my classmates, which is of great benefit to my English. I sincerely hope that I can apply for the host family. Yours, Li Hua
【名師點撥】
第一段陳述了寫作目的,但是缺少寫作背景,顯得非常突兀?忌鷳紫茸鲎晕医榻B,然后陳述寫信的目的。第一段可改為:Im Li Hua, an eighteen\|year\|old boy. I hear some American students are coming to study in our school for two weeks and some host families are needed. I am writing to recommend my family.
第二段本應有條理地陳述自己家庭具備的優(yōu)勢。但是,考生的寫作思路不清晰,內(nèi)容顯得雜亂無章。"My parents are both teachers and they teach me right from wrong."一句不符合寫作提綱,純屬廢話。"Although were not as rich as others, we live a comfortable life."一句意義過于模糊,沒有說清楚自己家庭具備的條件。結(jié)尾也沒有很好地呼應主題。 根據(jù)寫作提綱,第二段可改為:I think my family is qualified. To begin with, I am friendly and helpful, which helps me to get along well with others. Second, I speak English so fluently that I have no difficulty communicating with the native speakers. In addition, we have an extra bedroom, where the visiting students can stay. More importantly, an English student stayed with us last year, so we know how to receive foreign guests. 首先,使用主題句點明本段大意,然后用To begin with, Second, In addition和 More importantly陳述提綱要求的內(nèi)容,而且前后連貫,銜接緊密。 最后一段可改為:My family hope you will give us a chance. Looking forward to your reply. 這樣總結(jié)前文,呼應主題。
《考試大綱》中對寫作部分的要求是"考生應能:(1)清楚、連貫地傳遞信息,表達意思(2)有效運用所學語言知識"。 考生在寫作中應盡力做到:明確寫作目的,正確把握寫作內(nèi)容。內(nèi)容條理要清楚,行文要流暢,表達要地道。如果條理不清,行文沒有邏輯性,必然影響考生得分。
【典例3】假定你是李華,你校將接待一批來自美國的中學生進行為期兩周的交流活動。現(xiàn)在,學校正在為他們征尋寄宿家庭(host family)。請用英語寫一封信提出申請。內(nèi)容包括: 1.家庭基本情況;2.英語水平; 3.相關經(jīng)歷。 注意:1.詞數(shù)100左右;2. 可以適當增加細節(jié),以使行文連貫。
【思路分析】根據(jù)寫作要求,考生應寫一封申請信,向?qū)W校介紹自己的家庭情況,希望能入選寄宿家庭。申請信的第一段應表明寫作目的:申請成為寄宿家庭。第二段陳述自己的家庭具備的各種優(yōu)勢,包括家庭基本情況、英語水平和相關經(jīng)歷等;第三段表達希望獲準的愿望。
【學生習作】
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to apply for the host family that you have been searching for these days. Im Li Hua, an eighteen\|year\|old boy. I am friendly and helpful. I can communicate with native English speakers fluently. I am eager to make friends with foreigners so that I can learn more about Western cultures. My parents are both teachers and they teach me right from wrong. Although were not as rich as others, we live a comfortable life. I once volunteered to work for an international organization with my classmates, which is of great benefit to my English. I sincerely hope that I can apply for the host family. Yours, Li Hua
【名師點撥】
第一段陳述了寫作目的,但是缺少寫作背景,顯得非常突兀?忌鷳紫茸鲎晕医榻B,然后陳述寫信的目的。第一段可改為:Im Li Hua, an eighteen\|year\|old boy. I hear some American students are coming to study in our school for two weeks and some host families are needed. I am writing to recommend my family.
第二段本應有條理地陳述自己家庭具備的優(yōu)勢。但是,考生的寫作思路不清晰,內(nèi)容顯得雜亂無章。"My parents are both teachers and they teach me right from wrong."一句不符合寫作提綱,純屬廢話。"Although were not as rich as others, we live a comfortable life."一句意義過于模糊,沒有說清楚自己家庭具備的條件。結(jié)尾也沒有很好地呼應主題。 根據(jù)寫作提綱,第二段可改為:I think my family is qualified. To begin with, I am friendly and helpful, which helps me to get along well with others. Second, I speak English so fluently that I have no difficulty communicating with the native speakers. In addition, we have an extra bedroom, where the visiting students can stay. More importantly, an English student stayed with us last year, so we know how to receive foreign guests. 首先,使用主題句點明本段大意,然后用To begin with, Second, In addition和 More importantly陳述提綱要求的內(nèi)容,而且前后連貫,銜接緊密。 最后一段可改為:My family hope you will give us a chance. Looking forward to your reply. 這樣總結(jié)前文,呼應主題。








